moonvigilant
he/they/it aroace transmasc that reads a lot of indulgent queer fiction, platinum rank in haterism, socials at https://moonvigilant.carrd.co/
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3.40 average · 144 reviews
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this truly is peak cinema. you write a gay man being feral with hunger and you'll find me sitting at the table waiting. a full course meal for my gay ass trans soul.
now, with that set aside, if i really had to pick at this one, it'd be the fact that it's wholly written in present tense, even if certain scenes explicitly happened in the past. it's jarring but the writing was very easily consumed and i finished this whole thing in one sitting after dinner. take that how you will, it might not even be a problem for you!
secondly, and probably going be me ranting about something only marginally related, is that this was marketed as an erotica, from what i've seen, anyways. that was a damn fat lie, because the one (1) singular sex scene in this was just a few paragraphs long and barely went into further detail than telling us that, yes they dun did it.
and that's such a shame! because i was completely invested in the story, what the truth entails for the duo's relationship, and their struggles to come to terms with it, i didn't even need to be told "hey there's sex in here" to be sold on the concept. the plot and the internal monologues itself really were just so well written and solid, that it kinda rubs me wrong.
it made me think of how, the fact that people are getting so overly horny to the point that they have to be convinced to read something with sex, is just completely backwards and sad. i'm not a published writer by any means, but whenever i do write my silly little stories, i always felt like i had to 'insert horny' just to have a chance of someone reading and potentially enjoying them. it fucking sucks, it warps your perspective for the act of writing, and it derives all the fun out of it whenever you do want to write sex scenes.
maybe that was the case. maybe i'm just tweaking and overthinking this. but what is reading if not to invoke thoughts and ideas within people, no? my feelings has 0 bearing on my rating, of course. i enjoyed this very much, it's an easy 5/5 for me, read this if you want religious angst with a splash of horror.
