i’m barely into anything good right now and why does hayley have the writing style of a freshman in high school turning in a creative writing assignment? i get that it’s young adult but i didn’t expect it to read like this

the author should be using such vivid descriptions more sporadically imo, it just gets a little too much

ALSO, if you're using non-english words [and entire sentences] it should be the ones that have no direct translations (like honorifics or interjections or nicknames). if you're translating right after, might as well just write in english. this is a book aiming for an international audience after all. it gets tiring fast.